nice, but I'd lose the last line. Less is more.
How can I leave out the last line? It's a haiku...
"that's true, although the three line things isn't a hard rule"
Oh, I didn't know. Thanks! I'll have to look more into the rules and play around a bit. :)
wikipedia has a good description. However, I wouldn't worry to much about the "rules". I think the biggest concepts are, two seemingly contrasting things forming a third meaning and minimalism. I love Japanese art because it is minimalistic. Haiku rules/guidelines don't really translate well into English because the languages are so different so just go with what sounds cool and forget the rules!